Let me know if you have any questions. This is a great start and you just need to massage it a bit.
Wow, thanks SoCal, I really, really appreciate your input its the kind of stuff Im looking for. I appreciate your willingness to enumerate the various components thats what I need, and I will gladly return the favor .I can be very useful at times.
Later tonight I will look at the items you have addressed, and make corrections. Also, to understand the site better, I thought I would give you the concepts behind creating it.
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The site is a generic flash template, which I am wrenching on with Macromedia Dreamweaver suite.
My real goal with the site is to convince an REO industry reader to engage our services. My secondary goal is to make sure the site is sales driven beyond just a here we are, call us, online business card approach. Each header or section has a specific purpose and has been thought out, but some might be missing the mark. For example, the animated keys represent the transfer of possession; much the same as you receive keys after you purchase a home. In REO, it represents the final step in the foreclosure process.
As with my investigative services, there is nothing I want anybody to order since each service is different very similar to a law firm sites which only describe services. In fact in my PI business I dont work with the general public. City Attorneys, large corporate law firms, banks and title companies are my clients so the site is not designed to appeal to any members of the general public, or even my regular clients only people who immediately work in REO.
The site is also a work in progress, but then again, maybe not. Everything I want a reader to se is already on the site I am only looking for a phonecall or email since the reality is, I will need to conform to their industry software, and will not process any orders thru my site.
I use the winning through intimidation sales approach, wherein you create a sense urgency; make solutions available; have mechanisms to trigger action on part of the readers; and motivation for the reader to act quickly. I adopted the strategy from The Ultimate Sales Letter by Dan Kennedy.
I also adopted the unconventional strategy of painfully long descriptions of services. These descriptions also identify problems and solutions, raise and address questions the reader might have (without them asking), and again, are designed to create a sense of urgency, or even panic. The theory behind this strategy is to weed out all the impulsive type people I dont want them. I want the analytical person who will take the time to read thru everything.
So if somebody says to me the site is boring and they bailed cuz it was too long, then it has served its purpose! My printed sales material is the same a longwinded but fact-filled, unconventional and unique letter.
The site is also written in conversational English, as opposed to straight business, legalese or grammatically correct writing. Again, this is done on purpose and meant to stand out as unconventional.
Whew, anyhow, keep your thoughts coming